I would like some input on the poem I wrote in this blog..

mashaAllah, i just read this now. so you're a poet too. there are so many aspects to ppl subhanallah.. captures a moment maybe? i can realte to that:) 

Thank you very much for your comments. I really appreciate your in-depth perception.

Reason being why this poem probably feels 'unfinished' is because, you said yourself that you wrote this poem in a time of hardship and depression, usually such poems end with a remedy/solution/something which consolidates the feeling of the poet and how they plan to cope. But in another sense, the poem is as complete as can be, since, if this is what was intended, and the pattern of thought at the time of writing was such then, meh...I personally like it...

I can understand your point but I wrote this in a time of hardship and depression many many years ago...I was only 12 at the time. May I ask how you feel it is unfinished?

I like the poem but i dont know it kinda feels unfinished to me....maybe you were too anxious